Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Beyond The Door....

And who would have guessed that my first Sci-Wri assignment would be to write description?! 

Oh, the horror... says the child who turned Description-Skipping while reading into a fine art. I perfected that reading technique, and came pretty close to perfecting it in my writing as well. For a while I was trying to write a la Franklin Dixon - Frank had brown hair, Joe had blonde, they drove a yellow convertible, and that's all you need to know. Hey, it worked for him! Kind of. :P ANYWAY.

Enjoy. I think my style came as a bit of a surprise to my peer review group... but they were super nice about my wackiness, so I really appreciated them. :D The teacher said, Please remember when you get constructive criticism - they're criticizing your writing, not you.

But when you are a writer... they are criticizing you, even if they don't mean to.  It's a sad world... ;) But still I think this class might just be good for me... eep.

Beyond the Door
copyright moi. Don't mess with my school stuff. ;)

Picture in your mind a wide doorway, open to another world – a world of perfect blackness. Against that stark background, the first thing to catch your eye is an explosion of neon lights: swirls and spots of lime green mixed with cyan splashes, tiny flecks of hot magenta over ethereal amethyst splotches, and delicate sweeping strokes of electric blue. Like fireworks on the Fourth of July, the small lights move off into the distance, while in front and center-left, lime green and purple whirl together as if someone overturned a table of paint buckets. To the right, however, looms a menacing shape, like a ghostly purple manatee rising out of the darkness.
Look closer. Go straight to the center of the open doorway. That strange figure just above and to the right of the center? It is not truly the ghost of a long-departed manatee; no, it is the head and upper body of a robot with a mechanical left arm. The green-tipped hand – a rotating Gatling gun with a faint purple dagger projecting at an angle from its middle – leads back to a cylindrical blue wrist. The arm itself is outlined with purple, faintly blotched with blue, and painted over with magenta flames shooting back towards a separated shoulder. From the black space between torso and shoulder, tiny dots of cyan and purple spread out in both directions.
Near the upper right edge of the door, delicate lines of electric blue with almost white centers combine to become a helmet with horizontal stripes, with a long bird-like beak of darkening purple stretching straight out towards the center of the doorway. A tiny swirl of cyan-touched green projects a short distance from the helmet’s left, while one of blue and white rises upwards from the helmet’s right. Another separated shoulder follows, with the same bits of cyan and purple spreading out from it like the petals of a flower; the blackness they lead to swallows up any semblance of a right hand.
Starting from where that missing hand should be, slightly below the door’s top and just barely left of the midline, another petal of oval green dots heads upwards at an angle and eventually disappears off beyond the left edge of the doorway. Just below it in the left corner is another petal, this one of softly swirled green and black. Unlike the others, it is outlined by a fine sweep of cyan that turns quickly to purple, and appears almost more like a thin, elliptical light bulb than a flower petal.
Directly below this on the left side is another swirl of black and green, spinning away in three parts like a miniature waterspout, coming straight from the doorway’s center and leading off to the left. Swirls of amethyst touched with dark blue sweep behind the waterspout, crossing over the top of the purple-dotted petal at the robot’s shoulder and then continuing on towards the beaked helmet. Tiny specks of green change to cyan and then to blue, following the sweep of the amethyst swirl to the right and covering the thin streaks of magenta that line the swirls, before all colors, except for a single purple stripe, disappear into black. That stripe stretches straight back to the front of the beak-like diamond, however, connecting the two strange images like a straw between a robot and a waterspout.
Another purple swirl falls below the green waterspout, this one made up of three strips turning slowly to blue. Together they form the three-pointed star of a Mercedes Benz. Tiny flecks of purple near the left side of the star lead the eye off to the edge of the doorway, only to come sweeping back up from the bottom where the flower-petal fireworks again appear, the muted purple-blue circles that create them dotting their way back to the Mercedes Benz star. Larger ovals of green find their way from the upper right point of that star – near the center of the doorway – all the way down to the very bottom, forming a J-shaped flower petal of dots with a lower edge of light green that moves to a shade of light blue.
The bottom right corner is filled with the purple-flecked outline of the largest petal-shape of all, one that makes its way directly back to the left shoulder of the robot. The middle of the petal fades away to black as the specks of color grow smaller and smaller, but right from the disappearing center of that petal comes a thin stripe of magenta-touched purple. Following a faint S-shape, the band of color creeps up the right side of the doorway, until at last it runs directly into the back of the robot like a line of communication or control from some unknown commander.
It is a strange-looking figure. Yet, despite the otherworldliness of the image, it is merely a picture, a haunting combination of blues and greens and purples set against a black background. Firework or flower, manatee or robot, open door or just an upright rectangle – each idea gives simply another perspective, another piece of description, to this intriguing picture.

from ann arbor, mi - it's actually a fly larva. ha. 

4 thoughts shared:

Emily Shae said...

Awesome story, Katherine! I loved reading it. :D

Katherine Sophia said...

:D Thanks, Emily! It was fun to write, once I figured out how I was going to go about it. :)

Jessica said...

Super coolness itself! I loved it!!!! :D AND YOU TOOK THAT PICTURE!!!! COOL!!!!!!!!!!

Katherine Sophia said...

My teacher didn't particularly. :P LOL But I definitely learned a lot about description... :) Ack, that one I didn't take... I wish. I better make sure it's credited... :)


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